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Cat Said,
May 16th, 2011 @2:33 am  

. Tell them how long ‘ongoing’ is. (eg. once a week for the past 6 months, every day for the past 3 months)

“I learned independance in a teaching enviroment, through being allowed to take aside my own group consisting of around five children between the ages of five and six years old, and being able to learn the criteria in which was to be learned before the deadline, through this I also learned good time keeping which will be useful when studying primary education as it will allow me to be able to keep on top of my studies at a high standard”
a) “Environment” rather than “enviroment”
b) “Independence” rather than “independance”
c)This sentence is too long. It needs splitting into around 3 separate sentences. I suggest:
First sentence = “I learned independance in a teaching enviroment, through being allowed to take aside my own group consisting of around five children between the ages of five and six years old”

Second sentence = say what you do with these children

Third sentence = what you’ve learnt from taking aside your small group of children and why it makes you want to study the course

Fourth sentence = The bit about the criteria and “through this I learnt good time keeping skills”

Fifth sentence = “These will be useful when….”

. Tell them HOW you will be able to use your work experience in the future and WHY it has made you want to study the course

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